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Though there was no violence or inappropriate language, it is slightly hard to follow at times and may be confusing to younger children. It would help if the whole sci fi aspect is explained in a little more detail in the beginning and this may make it more appropriate for younger children. It is entertaining but not sure if it would keep a younger child's interest.
The theme is unique although slightly confusing. I feel that there should be more explanation about the Third Vibration, Lerion and Eleanor's extraordinary gift of being a powerful singer. It is hard for me to quite figure out if this is more sci fi or fantasy at certain points. Eleanor must go up against Lerion because he wishes to redesign the world (pg 15) but it would have been easier to follow if more is explained about Eleanor's extraordinary gift.
What changes would increase its chance of success and its KIDS FIRST! ranking? Although, I may sound like it is confusing at times, I still really did enjoy this script. I felt that characters are described well, it is unique and action-packed and entertaining. The powerful extraordinary power that Eleanor beholds should just be explained slightly more in-depth so even younger children will understand. It seems that Eleanor's mother thinks Eleanor is too young and needs training but it seems that Eleanor just knows what to do. It is slightly confusing on what Lerion is all about and I feel myself having to re-read certain parts to understand more clearly. If the sci fi aspect is more clearly explained, this will possibly make it appropriate for children ages 8-18. I would also take out the reference to "stupid child" made by John (pg 6). Although, this is the only word John used that I would change to something less offensive.
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